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Task 1. Work in pairs. Read your partner’s report. Then use the Peer Editing - SỬ DỤNG CÁC OUTLINE CÔ CHO ĐÊ LÀM BÀI,
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Name of your peer-checker: Vu Thi Thanh Thao

Content Y/N Feedback

Task Achievement
Does the report contain at least 150 words?
Y
Bài viết có đủ 150 từ không?
Has the author paraphrased the topic in the
introduction? Y
Người viết có paraphrase lại chủ đề bài viết không?
Has the overview presented the most significant
feature of the line chart(s) (e.g. the trend, the
highest/ lowest range of data, etc.)?
Y
Câu ‘Overview’ của bài có trình bày các đặc điểm
các đặc điểm chính của biểu đồ không (ví dụ: xu
hướng chính, các dữ liệu cao nhất hoặc thấp nhât)?
Has the report covered the most significant features
(e.g. the trend, the highest/ lowest range of data,
etc.) Y
Bài viết có bao gồm các đặc điểm quan trọng (ví dụ: xu hướng
chính, các số liệu cao nhất hoặc/và thấp nhất)

Coherence & Cohesion

Has the information been grouped into paragraphs
clearly?
Y
Thông tin có được tập hợp trong các đoạn có rõ
ràng không?
Is the information presented in a logical order?
N
Thông tin có được trình bày theo trật tự có logic không?

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Are there at least 3 transitional expressions used

correctly (e.g. First, Besides, Overall, etc.)?
Bài viết có chứa ít nhất 3 cụm từ để nối câu các câu Y
trong đoạn và các đoạn đoạn không (ví dụ: các từ
như ‘First’, ‘Besides’, ‘Overall’, v.v.)?
Lexical Resource
Are there any spelling errors?
N
Bài viết có lỗi sai chính tả không?
Does the author repeat the vocabulary?
Y
Người viết có mắc các lỗi lặp từ vựng không?
Does the text contain vocabulary specific to line
graphs?
N
Bài viết có chứa các từ vựng chuyên biệt dành cho loại bài viết
miêu tả Line graph không?

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Are the sentences grammatically correct?
Y
Ngữ pháp của các câu có đúng không?
Does the writer use punctuation correctly?
N
Người viết có sử dụng đúng dấu câu không?
Does the writer use verb tenses and subject-verb
agreement?
Người viết có sử có đúng các thì trong tiếng anh và sử dụng N
đúng ngữ pháp cho sự tương quan giữa chủ ngữ và động từ
không?

Timing
Was the task completed within 20 minutes?
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Task 2. Practice analyzing and writing a report for the following line graphs. You
should spend about 20 minutes on each task.

1. The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobiles
(cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in
euros.

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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make
comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

OUTLINE FOR WRITING THE REPORT

INTRODUCTION: PARAPHRASE THE GIVEN TOPIC(what the graphs is about, unit of
measurement, where, period?)
OVERVIEW: Demo, Lex, Alpha increased while Sim TX remained unchanged. In addition,
there is a significant increase in monthly price of Alpha’s contract.
BODY 1: compare and describe similarities of Demo, Lex and Alpha (Which one is the lowest,
what was the trend after four months? which one is the highest, what was the trend during the
first six months of the year? Which one experienced the similar trend?
BODY 2: describe Sim TX (when did it peak and how much? How much was it after the peak?
synomyms:
- cost = price
- monthly = every month
- contract = contractor = plan
- number = figure

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The line graph illustrates the average every month price contract for four different mobiles units
are measured in euros in a European country from January to September 2002.
Generally, there is an upward trend in the figue of Demo, Lex and Alpha for many months, while
Sim TX remained unchanged.
In January, Alpha contracts average price, it began at around 5 Euros, and then to remaining
unchanged in June. Over the next four months, it rising to much up 25 Euros in September. The
average price contract of Lex in about 13 Euros, then it peaked at 14 Euros in six months of the
year. After four months, it growing to around 18 Euros. And Domo contracts average price is
highest, increasing from 15 to 20 Euros from January to June. Then four months later, it rising to
much up to between 20 and 25 Euros in September, before rising dramatically to about 25 Euros
in July.
On the other hand, the average price contract of Sim TX, it began approximately at 9 Euros, and
in six months, it rising to around 14 Euros. After four months later, it falling to 9 Euros again in
September.

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2. The graph below shows the number of cars manufactured in four different countries
from 2020 to 2035.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make
comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

OUTLINE FOR WRITING THE REPORT

INTRODUCTION: PARAPHRASE THE GIVEN TOPIC (what the graphs is about, when, what
projection (future) for car manufacturing industry in the future unit of measurement, when,
where?)
OVERVIEW: It is predicted that there will have been a decline in the number of cars
manufactured in Japan, the USA, and UK by the end of the period. Meanwhile, this kind of
industry is forecast to slightly increase in China during the period o
BODY 1: in 2002, how many cars were produced in the USA, what is the figure estimated for
the year 2025? Does UK also experience the same trend, how many cars is predicted to be
produced by UK? Does Japan produce cars by far more than the USA and UK over the period?
what is the trend for car manufacturing in Japan by 2025? Since 2025, what is the predition for
car manufacturing in Japan? How many cars is predicted to be produced in Japan by 2035

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BODY 2: What prediction for manufacturing car in China? what was the figure of car production
in China in 2020? How is this figure compared to that of other three countries? what figure is
projected for car production in China by 2035?
synonyms:
- the number of cars = how many cars
- prediction = forecast = estimate = projection

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The line graph illustrates how many cars manufactured in four different countries in 2020,
projections for car manufacturing industry in the future in 2035.
As we can see, there will have been a decline in the number of cars manufactured in Japan, the
USA, and UK by the end of the period. Meanwhile, this kind of industry is forecast to slightly
increase in China during the period in 2035.
In 2020, there are 300 cars were produced in the USA, the figure estimated for the year 2025
falling to around 10 cars. UK also experience the same trend, it has 200 cars is predicted to be
produced. Japan produced 50 more cars than the USA and UK over the period. In 2025, the
predition for car manufacturing in Japan, it will grow approximately 400 cars. And in 2035,
Japan will drop to 100 cars.
In 2020, China has 100 cars were produced. This figure compared to lowest other countries.
Besides, the figure is projected for car production will increase approximately 150 cars in China
by 2035.

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