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- 231219 - Nguyễn Khánh Linh- Kết quả bài thi Viết (Writing)
- 231219 - Nguyễn Khánh Linh- Kết quả bài thi Viết (Writing)
Điểm số 3/9
Student’s essay:
The bar chart shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of
different employment status in 1998-99. The number of each column are very
different.
Unemployed and retired is the same. Unemployed and retired are the most, reach
about 80 hours a week. Employed part time and employed full time are the lowest
columns and about 40 hours a week. Only female has employed part time and
housewives. Both male and female have employed full time.
Teacher’s correction:
The bar chart shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of
different employment status in 1998-99. The number of each column are very different
compares the quantity of free time spent for pastime activities by residents according
to their gender and occupational status
(Lack of overview)
Citizens who are unemployed and retired is share the same amount of time spent on
leisure activities, at about 85 and 80 hours for males and females respectively.
Unemployed and retired are the most, reach about 80 hours a week (present this key
feature in the overview). Employed part time and employed full time Part-time and
full-time employed people are the lowest columns and invest the least amount of time
for entertainment, at about 40 hours a week. Only females has employed part time and
housewives. Both male and female have employed full time. Lastly, housewives enjoyed
approximately 50 hours of pastime which was 10 hours higher than the figure for part-
time female workers
1. Task Response/ Task Achievement (Khả năng trả lời bài thi):3
The response is an attempt to address the task.
Bố cục không hợp lý. Thiếu overview. Chỉ trình bày được số ít đặc điểm nổi bật. Đã
lựa chọn được key feature, tuy nhiên số liệu mô tả còn lộn xộn
Lưu ý: Kết quả kiểm tra sẽ được bảo lưu trong vòng 02 tháng sau khi làm bài.
Điểm số 3/9
Teacher’s correction:
The environment is destroyed by humans. Environmental damage is a very important
problem of such an alarming issue that most countries nowadays are confronting with.
What is environmental damage? In terms of the definition, environmental damage is
when the environment is polluted and unsafe the deterioration of the environment
through depletion of resources such as air, water and soil. Living in a polluted area
causes people to have health problems. The reason is the waste from factories. Due to
hazardous industrial waste, people are more vulnerable to health problems.
Environmental degradation, It also comes from also includes deforestation, using too
much plastic bags and plastic bottles (wrong definition/example of deforestation, I
suggest googling the accurate one from the Internet). The responsibility belongs to us.
We should use less plastic bag, plastic bottles, save the energy, use eco-friendly item
opt for environmentally-friendly products instead of non-degradable ones, such as
plastic bags and bottles. We can do some meaningful activities such as making the
beach clean, collecting garbage clearing beaches by collecting litter along the
seashores. Everyone should take shoulder the responsibility of protecting our green
and clear Earth. The environment will be green and clean if everyone make an effort.
Lưu ý: Kết quả kiểm tra sẽ được bảo lưu trong vòng 02 tháng sau khi làm bài.