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question I received How this change
WP submission: made to what I
(from impacts my paper:
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whom/where?)
Both The WPs:
Allison: The citations Now citation in
should be in Chicano chicano style More proper citation
In-text parenthetical
style
citation
Both the WPs:
Allison: Punctuations Now all punctuation
More standard
should be inside is in quotation marks
Punctuation not in punctuation use
quotation marks
quotation marks
WP1:
The development and
Peer: your article is research on Steam The title is much
The development and
not mainly about engine Analyzing more clear about
research on Steam
steam engine, but writing conventions what this article is
engine
writing skills Xuanyi Zhou talking about

WP1: Specifically, the

article analyzes how
Specifically, how the the steam engine
Allison: sentence affect people’s Solve a grammar
steam engine affect
fragment thoughts and mistake
people’s thoughts and
industrialization in industrialization in
China: China:

Peer: You could The 2 discourse Now the connection

evaluate the communities view a between different
WP1:
connection between same topic in main arguments and
the different main different degree,...... discourse
Nothing
arguments and the different machines. communities are
discourse community. clear.
WP1:It suggests that Allison: meaning It suggests that the Now the meaning is
the Chinese steam unclear Chinese steam engine clear.
engine is lack of right didn’t have proper
mechanical structure, and efficient
which is caused by mechanical
asymmetrical structure..This proved
information, and this the author’s idea that
proved the author’s the Chinese
idea that the Chinese “misunderstood the
“misunderstood the steam engine”
 steam engine”
Peer: I think not that
WP1： much citations are A relatively short
The article is much
needed, you should quotation
more concise
A very long quotation keep your article
concise.
Allison:what do these Further, these
different types of Now it is clear how
evidence tell us about evidence uses proves the different types tell
WP1:
the disciplines and about different
their discourse that researchers ...... disciplines and
Nothing
communities? discourse
is objective. communities.

The reasons for The connections

between different
WP1: Allison: Again what
structures and
do these conventions the different
different discourse
Nothing mean?
structures ......detail. communities are
elaborated.
WP2: Grammar mistake
Find the grammar I was woken up
mistake fixed
I was waken up
Allison:
WP2: a country named A minor mistake
Great Britain is a
a country named proper noun and “Great Britain”. fixed
“great Britain”. needs to be
capitalized
WP2: Leaving the crowd, I
bought some clothes.
Allison: abrupt
With joyful emotion I Then I felt hungry. I Smoother transition
transition
walked into a walked into a
restaurant. restaurant.
WP2: Peer: Adding weather
could make it more 1849/11/21 Sunny It is more like a diary
1849/11/21 like diary
WP2: Now all examples are The arguments
Allison:Provide together with
Examples are not examples corresponding become stronger.
with arguments arguments.
WP2: Allison: evidences Now examples are The article is now
 with enough
Some examples are are confusing explanation and clear more clear.
confusing as structure
evidences