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Erase all personal information on your essay. Paste a screenshot of the top of your 1st page as
proof:
Make sure you’ve included the word count and the Works Cited Page.
X Place an “X” here to acknowledge you know you will receive a 10% deduction for not
including either item.
1 pt
Change all contractions to full words. Place a screenshot of at least one before and after
change you’ve made
Before:
After:
5 pts Writing Expression
Catalog five writing expression improvements, grammar or otherwise, you’ve made by pasting
before and after screenshots and completing the rationale section on the right.
Before Screenshot After Screenshot Rationale for change
“As interactions occurred, “Therefore, as interactions The sentence didn’t flow well
African American stereotypes occurred, African American after the previous sentence
targeted their language” stereotypes targeted their so, I added a transition
language.” phrase to make it easier to
understand.
“ McDonald’s advertisements “As seen in Figure 3, the “Get I changed the sentence
of the time associated the Down” campaign was structure to make the senece
campaign with the portrayal associated with the flow better and easier to
of African Americans in representation of African understand.
advertisements like seen in Americans in McDonald's
Figure 3.” advertisements.”
Explain in your own words how specifically you will improve your essay.
Reading over my essay, I noticed that there are a lot of unclear moments where my writing
can be hard to discern what I was trying to say. My first step is to correct all those mistakes,
making it easier for the reader to understand my explanation and analysis of McDonald’s ads.
Afterwards, I look to add more to my analysis so I can go deeper into understanding the
purpose behind the ads. Then after, narrowing down the analysis I’ll go back and fix all the
grammar mistakes, before reading over one finally time to make sure I like my final draft.
Specific steps are chronicled General steps are listed that Steps are included that are
that get at the essence of the represent an internalization of largely a restatement of the
editor’s comments and the editor’s comments and editor’s comments; a clear
represent a clear, new, may result in a qualitative plan for changing the
positive direction for the improvement of the essay. character of the essay has
essay. not been articulated.