Summarize each category’s challenge to you.
In your own words, what are you supposed to do
in order to score well in this category?
Category A Category B
The author The author analyzes
understands the text their evidence to
and uses examples connect it to their
from the text they topic
read.
Pull quotes from the text and apply a lesson for how this student is performing in each rubric
category. Score the example per category on the right.
Quote
Category A Kichijiro values his life
over Rodrigues’ safety and
betrays Rodrigues for a mere
“tiny number of silver coins”.
Similarly,
Judas did the same to Jesus
Christ and sold Jesus to the
Pharisees for thirty pieces of
silver.
Jesus’, there is a
difference in the intentions in
that Christ does it selflessly
while Rodrigues does it for
himself.
Category B Silence’s powerful themes.
Shusaku Endo has
successfully alluded
characters
Category C “Lastly, Endo also uses the
Category C Category D
The organization The language the
style the author uses author uses to
to present an explain their
understanding of their understanding
essay
What it shows Score
The author understands the 4
importance of allusion in their essay 5
as the examples they use, clearly
depicts allusion. The comparison
between Kichijiro and Judas is
clearly stated with the actions of
both being the same
The author alludes that Rodrigues is
Jesus and explains earlier in the
paragraph how so. However, in their
line of inquiry the author never
mentions differences between the
allusions thus, making some of his
statements contradicting each other.
The author states that he mentioned 3
many powerful themes from the text, 4
however the theme he only really
discusses is allusion
The author mentions this line in his
conclusion, however he backs it up
by saying that Rodriguqez has
clearly different intentions to Jesus.
Wouldn’t this mean that Rodrigues
wasn't an allusion to Jesus?
By formatting each paragraph to 5
 antagonist of the story, Inoue,
as a symbol of Satan.”
Father
Valignano being "utterly
opposed to [his] journey to
Japan" (Endo 13),
Category D thought-provoking dilemmas
such
characters undergo.
draws parallels
Write down takeaways from the discussion of the exemplar and how specifically you will apply
this lesson to your own work.
Takeaways from exemplar
Important to focus on one singular literary
device
Have well structured analysis that is straight
to the point
Look to use in text citations
describe a certain character, the 4
author allows the reader to clearly
understand who they’re talking
about. This disrupts any confusion
that may occur because he doesn't
have multiple characters in a
paragraph.
The author is able to seamlessly add
intext examples, where the quotes
he uses make sense to the essay
without disrupting its flow
The author uses this language to 4
clearly describe what the author of 4
Silence is describing. He
understands what the author is
trying to incorporate in silence and
clearly states in in their intro
paragraph
The author clearly understands the
language within his line of inquiry
and is able to incorporate it into his
essay
What I will do
Decide which pathos device I want to analyze
the most
Don’t repeat myself in analysis and only state
each thing once
Try and incorporate the wording from the
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