MANDATORY RETIREMENT AGE (PAGE 132)

In some places, workers are required to retire at a specific age. In other places, workers can retire
when they choose. In your opinion, should there be a mandatory retirement age for all workers?
EXAMINATIONS, ABOLITION OF (PAGE 174)
Most education systems rely on examination to encourage children to study, but as a result,
children suffer from too much stress and they never learn to be creative. Therefore examinations
should be abolished. Do you agree?

Hải Nam
Mandatory retirement:
Introduction:
In this day and age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue
of whether people should stop working at a specific age. Some people assert that
employers should not be given mandatory retirement age, whereas many others
argue that it is legal to enforce this mandatory. Personally, I am in favor of the
latter view for a number of reasons.
Outline
Body 1
- Topic sentence: Mandatory retirement should be seen negatively to some
extent
- Main 1: The legislation about the retirement age would be an extreme measure.
- Support: People must not be treated like children, they know their body and
their health so individuals have the right to decide for themselves whether they
wish to devote their entire life to their job or prefer to follow other pursuits. In
addition, some people may need to keep working for financial reasons. For
example, they have not paid off their mortgages or they are still supporting
children.
- Main 2: This law would be a disastrous economically
- Support: The rapidly aging population in Western countries, where people are
living longer and longer, means that a greater proportion of the population is
living to depend on pensions while a smaller proportion is working to provide
money. At a specific time in the future, there may not have a balanced economy
between the young and the old.
Body 2
- Admit: In contrast, some others may claim that employers, who continue to
work wat past the normal retirement age can prevent young talented performers
from breaking into the field. For example in the world of arts, musicians,
writers, and actors, people much prefer watching well-known figures rather than
a normal person
- Counter: However, the youngsters are very talented as well as many popular
figures. Younger performers and writers will get their chance. There is already
much media expose for prodigies and young stars, especially in the film and
music industries
Examinations, abolition of:
Introduction:
- In this day and age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue
of whether the process of education should abolish examinations. Some people
assert that many students have been faced with stress and pressure and need to
remove examinations, whereas many others argue that it is normal for students
to face pressure and that exams are needed in education systems. Answer?
Body 1:
- Topic sentence: Examination should be seen negatively to some extent
- Main 1: Exams may be unfair to students
- Support: Examinations test the ability to memorize large amounts of
information for short periods of time. It does not necessarily test creativity,
imagination, or even a flexible understanding of the principles involved in a
subject; on the whole, they test the rote learning of facts. Therefore, it is possible
It is therefore possible for students to idle for a year and then learn the course in
a few days, just as they might successfully ‘question spot’ and only revise a few
topics that might come up in the exam, they will have a higher rate of passing
exams with high scores.
- Main 2: Students will be put under pressure and therefore may harm general
health.
- Support 2: The pressure attached to exams, because of their significance both
for the future and the stress involved in intense revision. Not only can this
pressure cause a pupil to perform less well in the exam than he or she would in a
stress-free environment, but it can also lead to breakdowns or worse. School
drop-outs, discipline problems, and even suicides are increasingly common,
often due to worry about poor grades and the effect that failure in one set of
exams will have on the future.
Body 2:
- Admit: In contrast, some others may claim that examinations that test a
student's intelligence are highly controversial. Due to the fact that many can not
judge whether the pupils used the right thought process in reaching an answer,
and can not measure creativity, initiative, hard work, and the ability to
communicate. So the test just has the differences between right and wrong will
be the best choice. However, these intelligence tests can bring many more
demerits than normal tests. This exam is more reliable to evaluate the student’s
potential, both for education and for employers. The pupils may be used to
pinpoint exactly strengths and weaknesses. For example, one can strong at
logical inference while poor at lateral thinking. These evaluations are much
more useful to employers in selecting the right candidate for the right job.
Cấu trúc không rõ ràng mạch lạc
lương thị mỹ duyên
AGREE
Intro: In the contemporary world, the examination which is a standard measure
to evaluate how much knowledge and information that pupils have learned, is
also a vital part of curriculum in education system. However, this does not affect
their creativity and initiative development, so there has been much discussion
revolving around the issue of whether examination might be eliminated.
Answer??
Body 1
Topic sentence: Compelling arguments can be made that examination causes
some negative effect on the student.
M1: Examination can not be evaluated totally pupil’s ability.
S1: This is mainly due to the fact that before performing the examination,
students cramming and revise to do the exam well. Hence, examination like to
check the ability to memorize large amounts of information for short periods of
time.
S2: Further, the exam can test the previously learned knowledge and formulas
which is not able to test creativity, imagination, or even a flexible understanding
of the principles involved in a subject.
M2: Examination put significant pressure on students.
S1: Students, who rote- learning fact and living an intense revision environment,
is extremely detrimental. it can also lead to. School drop-outs, discipline
problems, and even suicides are increasingly common, often due to worry about
poor grades and the effect that failure in one set of exams will have on the
future.
Body 2:
S1:Câu đầu tiên phải nói đến “nhiều người phản đối ALTERNATIVES TO
EXAMINATIONS” trước, sau mới đi cụ thể vào IQ tests/coursework… In
contrast, some others may claim that Intelligence tests are highly controversial
and can only differentiate between right and wrong answers. They cannot judge
whether the pupil used the right thought process in reaching the answer, and
cannot measure creativity, initiative, hard work, structure, and the ability to
communicate. All of these qualities are evaluated by examinations. Coursework
is too open to cheating by candidates (see the increasing market for buying
essays on the Internet) and to teacher corruption due to the huge pressure, they
are under to push upgrades.
HOWEVER: không có hình thức nào là hoàn hảo và examinations cũng tồn tại
những limitations nhất định VD: a student’s essay or opinion may be thought
correct by one examiner and incorrect by another. Two examiners could indeed
mark the same set of papers and grade them completely differently. This is why
marks given for exams are frequently moderated. Such a system also gives the
impression that candidates from different years can be compared, when in fact,
with ‘grade inflation, a B grade achieved by a student a year ago may be worth
an A today. Moreover, The corruption of teachers needs to be taken into
consideration in professional ethical behavior, they must be those who uphold
honesty.

Phương Linh
MANDATORY RETIREMENT AGE
Intro: In this age of change, public debate has been going on over whether the
mandatory retirement age should be given to every single elder worker. While
there is compulsory retirement in some places, optional retirement is offered in
others. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view for several reasons.
Body 1:
Topic sentence: compelling arguments can be made that forcing the old
individual to retire is inappropriate and restricts human rights.
main 1: firstly, mandatory retirement can unnecessarily curtail their financial
prospects.
S1: To be more specific many old people are in their thriving period, retirement
itself can pointlessly deprive the community of the wealth of the experience and
ability that these people have accumulated.
S2: for example, despite who does the judge, many aged people like lawyers,
doctors, and business people are likely to be in a prosperous state of life when
approaching the age they have to retire.
Main và Support chưa liên quan
Main nói: Curtail triển vọng tài chính CỦA NGƯỜI GIÀ
Support lại xoay quanh việc này ảnh hưởng đến XÃ HỘI như thế nào
Main 2: additionally, these individuals must not be treated like kids.
S1: they should decide on their own not to be limited by the extreme legislation.
S2: obviously, it is legitimate whether they want either devote the rest of their
life to work or other pursuits or even be willing to get retirement.
Body 2:
S1: I admit that mandatory retirement is necessary for aged people in many
contexts.
S2: Apparently, when elders reach the age of 65, they become less competent,
lucid and reliable to continue working.
S3: However, its disadvantages outweigh the advantage, freely choosing the day
to retire is more beneficial than crucially making retirement on senile people.
EXAMINATIONS, ABOLITION OF
Intro: In the contemporary world, the examination is widely assumed as an
assessment to motivate students to study in most countries, but this results in
much stress and strain on students and lacking creativity in the learning method.
There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of the abolition of
examinations. However, I disagree with this idea for a number of reasons.
Body 1:
Topic sentence: Examinations are beneficial on different levels
Main 1: First and foremost, exams are the most trusted evaluation due to their
comprehension.
S1: The exams test students' ability to apply the knowledge they have learned to
an unfamiliar question and to communicate their knowledge to the examiner.
S2: undeniably, many university entrances are based on examination results as
the basis to broadly evaluate the academic faculty of students.
Main 2: in the second place, exam pressure is occasionally beneficial for
students in some way.
S1: that is to say, it can train students' tolerance and tenacity to prepare and deal
with the difficulties they may have in their working life.
S2: evidently, In comparison, it is likely that students taking part in curricula
without exams where there is continuous assessment tend to struggle in tackling
the increased workload involved in the course.
Body 2:
S1: In contrast, others may claim that examinations must be abolished for
several reasons.
S2: the fundamental for this is that the stress involved in the intense revision is
extremely detrimental to students' mental and physical health, leading to many
results of grief such as suicides which are increasingly common nowadays.Em
chưa đập cái này. Đồng thời, em đã nhắc đến “stressed” ở trên rồi thì đừng dùng
nó để counter. Cô đề xuất lấy “mọi người nghĩ rằng có những alternatives hiệu
quả hơn” (IQ tests, coursework..) sau đó em HOWEVER những cái alternatives
này cũng không tốt (nêu ra tại sao)
S3: despite that examinations still pose plenty of undeniable advantages in the
education systems that outweigh their drawbacks. Mà đã kết luận luôn

Nguyễn Quý Hoàng

In some places, workers are required to retire at a specific age. In other places,
workers can retire when they choose. In your opinion, should there be a
mandatory retirement age for all workers?
Intro : In the contemporary world, It is believed by many that a mandatory
retirement age are neccesary .Personaly , • However, I disagree with this idea for
a number of reasons
Body 1: Compelling arguments can be made that policy for obligattion
retirement age are not essential.
Main 1 :First and foremost, people whose faculties are not impaired should be
allowed to continue working for as long as they are able to.
- To be more exact, in jobs which does not require many physiscal condition
such as working at the office,people should have right to retire when they want.
Hai câu này không liên quan
-Additionally, the doctors or judments would have stack a huge amount of
experience when they become older so that they can perform their jobs more
effectively.
Main2 : secondly, this policy would bring e disastrous economically.
- human’s longevity is becoming longer due to the massive deveblopment of the
technolygy and it alsso mean that a greater proportion of the population are
drawing pensions and a smaller proportion are working to provide the money .
-Moreover, many study show that , people’s physical and mental health
significantly decrease after retiring which could to lead the increase the number
of years that pensioners require medical care
Em thêm một support chốt là vì vậy nếu người ta nghỉ sẽ có ít người đóng thuế
hơn và nhiều người nhận pension/care hơn => hại kinh tế
Body2 : there are groups of inhabitants believed that Mandatory retirement are
neccesary in order to help people , who are dominated by their careers and the
world of work, to be free from the stress and enjoy life .
- However, it is individuals’s right to decide for themselves whether they wish to
devote their entire life to their job or prefer to follow other pursuits
- Evidently,some people willing go to work regardless their age because of their
financial reasons.
- For instance, they need money to improve their quality of life, or supporting
their children.
Counter ổn, good job em!
Most education systems rely on examination to encourage children to study, but
as a result, children suffer from too much stress and they never learn to be
creative. Therefore examinations should be abolished. Do you agree?
In the contemporary world, exemination system has been widely used.Some
people believed examination need to be prohibited whereas there some objection
of this view. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view => không nên bỏ
Body 1 Compelling arguments can be made that the examination should not be
abolished.cấu trúc body 1 sai rồi. Ý kiến của mình cho lên body 2 để đòn bẩy
Main 1 : examination are neccesary in many school system
- Exams are intended to make pupils use what they have learned to answer a
question they have not encountered before.
- This also mean that ,it can evaluate student’s ability in terms of applying
knowledge that they have learned.
Main 2 : Examination can be a useful tool in the progress of student.
-As exam can evaluate many espects of students, it can detail about the student’s
strong and weak point and from that, they can have appropriate measure to
improve themselves
-Examination can provide objective judgement vision about student’s abilities so
that student can mark for their progress in study
Body 2 some people belive that examination can put a lot of pressure and burden
on students as it often attached with intense revision and stress.furthermore, it is
belived to lead to the increase in School drop-outs, discipline problems and even
suicides.
-However, Pressure is a fact of working life.They might be under lots of
pressure when they have to make money to earn a living.
-Therefore, the stress are innevitable and having examination can help them to
get used to it .Đến chỗ này thì counter đang rất ổn nhé
- Beside that, pressure can part come from their parent’s and school’s
expectation, who want students get good result.To be more specific,parents can
force children to learn an enormous of workload which sometime are not related
to the examinations. Đoạn này hơi thừa, như kiểu cố nhồi thêm một ý nữa nhưng
k cần thiết lắm ấy

Minh Anh
Intro:
In the contemporary world, there has been much discussion revolving around the
issue of whether a retirement age should be obligatory. Some people assert that
government must establish the retirement age while many others argue that
people have the right to decide when to stop working choose an optional age.
Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. => không nên có mandatory
retirement age
Body 1:
Topic sentence:
Optional retirement age is beneficial on different levels.
Main 1:
The primary factor that needs to be taken into consideration is that mandatory
retirement age is not a practical idea in the workplace.
Sentence 1:
To be more exact, the huge majority whose faculties are not impaired should be
allowed to continue working as long as they are able to.
Sentence 2:
In other words, people suffering from the financial problem have to work hard to
support families, buy houses, and so on.
Sentence 3:
Additionally, the compulsory retirement age would unnecessarily curtail many
careers and pointlessly deprive the community of the wealth of experience and
ability.
Sentence 4:
To be more specific, lawyers, businessmen, and doctors are required a huge
amount of experience to be able to do the job.
Thôi xong sắp xếp main support không liên quan tí nào lên lớp hỏi cô để cô giải
thích
Body 2:
On the other hand, some others may claim that sự xuất hiện của nhân lực già có
thể ảnh hưởng đến người trẻ trong một vài lĩnh vực. VÍ DỤ: in the world of arts,
if musicians, writers, composers, and actors continue to work beyond the age of
65, this will prevent young talented performers from breaking into the field.
But closer examination would reveal that younger performers will get their
chance, and there is already much media exposure for young stars in the film
and music industries. Apparently, many composers have continued to work past
the mandatory retirement age and also have been rewarded for their dedication.
Intro:
In the contemporary world, public debate has been going on over whether
examinations should be removed. Some people assert that any kind of exams is
necessary to test the ability of a singular student, whereas many others argue that
students suffer from many mental problems related to examinations and
therefore should be abolised. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. =>
nên bỏ
Body 1:
Topic sentence:
Examinations create a wide variety of issues.
Sentence 2: MAIN 1
The primary factor that needs to be taken into consideration is that examinations
are not practical.
Sentence 3:
To be more specific, examinations mean that students are required to memorise
a large amount of information for a short period of time.
Sentence 4:
As a result, there is a common phenomenon that students cram for exams so that
the results may not reveal their true academic ability.
Sentence 5: MAIN 2
There is no denying that public exams for example GCESs, A-levels are set
outside the school by examiners, not by the teachers who are familiar with
students.
Support Main 2: Obviously, the pupils will find that the exams bear little
relation to the course they have been studying, which leads to poor academic
results.
Body 2:
Some arguments can be made that pressure is a fact of working life, as are
deadlines, and both need to be prepared. Apparently, examinations will be used
to test how can students handle the pressure to be ready for the future.
However, students are under too much stress and pressure from exams. To be
more exact, pupils are mostly in adolescence, which means they experience
rapid physical, cognitive and psychosocial growth so that it can lead to
breakdowns if they perform less well in the exam. That is to say, even discipline
problems and suicides are increasingly common, often due to worry about poor
academic performance. Em đưa thêm cả các hệ quả (drop-outs, suicide,…)

Khánh Huyền Vũ
EXAMINATIONS, ABOLITION OF
These days, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of
whether examination – a widely used way to nudge students toward learning –
should be banned because of its reverse effects on students’ mentality or not. In
this essay, I will explain why abolition of exams should be implemented for a
better educational system.
Body 1
– Main 1: Examination is actually an unfair system to many students.
– Support: That is to say, in essence, exams test the ability to memorise large
amounts of information for short periods of time. It therefore just tests the rote-
learning ability of students as they usually cram for the upcoming exams instead
of deep learning during the course of a year’s study, which is an initial purpose
of this system. There are many students who are idle for a year and only revise
some topics that might come up in the exam. Consequently, a lower-quality
educational system might gradually be formed. Good!
Body 2
– Counter: Some people assert exams entail pressure, and that pressure is a fact
of working life, as are deadlines, and both need to be prepared for and tested.
The number of people who cannot handle pressure is very small.
– Main 2: However, they are underrated the pressure attached to exams that is
extremely detrimental to the student.
– Support: School drop-outs, discipline problems and even suicides are
increasingly common due to worry about poor grades and the effect that failure
in one set of exams will have on the future. Furthermore, parents and schools are
culpable in reminding consistently about the adverse impact on the future if their
children fail an exam and hence increasing the pressure.

In the contemporary world, there has been much discussion revolving around the
issue of whether people can retire whenever they want or there should be a
retirement age at which senior workers are forced to stop working for workers to
obey. From my perspective, I am in favour of the latter view due to a host of
reasons. => nên có mandatory retirement age
Body 1 –
Main 1: The primary factor that needs to be taken into consideration is that
retirement provides a time for people to pursue creative and educational
interests, and also to give something back to the community with charitable
work. –
Support: Too many people these days are dominated by their careers and the
world of work. As more and more people live beyond retirement age by two
decades, this period of life should be free from the stress and strain of work.
Additionally, mandatory retirement age gives people the spur to develop other
sides of themselves and broaden their lives.
Body 2 – Counter: In the world of the arts, musicians, writers, actors and
composers continue to work way past the normal retirement age. There has been
many artists that have set example of this view such as Sir John Gielgud who
won an Oscar at the age of 77 or Sir Michael Tippett who continued to work
past his ninetieth birthday. Lên lớp hỏi cô để cô giải thích chỗ Counter này
Main 2: Nevertheless, this prevents young talented performers and writers from
breaking into the field. A mandatory retirement age would prevent those over 65
from taking paid jobs and hence open up the field for young talent to come
through. Mandatory retirement would thus encourage meritocracy in the arts as
well as in business. Older artists could continue to do creative work on an
unpaid basis, and should be encouraged to work for charities and teach younger
artists, perhaps from underprivileged backgrounds, on a voluntary basis in their
retirement.

Duyên

Intro đâuu??
M1: Spur to developing work market for young people
S1: Many judges, surgeons will be able to work effectively after the age of 65,
many will become less and less competent, lucid. It might be endangering life or
causing miscarriages of justice. A mandatory retirement age of 65 for all would
guarantee that this does not happen, and would put an end to the making of
crucial constitutional and judicial decisions by senile, out-of-touch judges and
politicians. Đáng lẽ ra đây là main 2 thì hợp lý này => When the elderly retires,
the young in this industry will be the ones to replace that position, changing
human resources helps create jobs for young people.
S2: In the world of the arts, musicians, writers, actors and composers continue to
work way past the normal retirement age. This prevents young talented
performers and writers from breaking into the field. A mandatory retirement age
would prevent those over 65 from taking paid jobs (book deals, film roles,
positions in orchestras) and hence open up the field for young talent to come
through. Mandatory retirement would thus encourage meritocracy in the arts as
well as in business
M2: Certain age for resting
S1: if not have legislation-workholic do not know when they should be stopped
to work. Over 65 ages, this period of life should be free from the stress and
strain of work. It provides a time for people to pursue creative and educational
interests, and also to give something back to the community with charitable
work or broaden their lives.
Despite the abovementioned upside of mandanory retirement age law should be
enacted, I tend to believe that banning legistation bring more benefits overall.
M1: This legislation would be an extreme measure characteristic of an
overbearing ‘nanny state’
S1: They do not need anyone decide the free of theirshelves. I believe that each
individuals let decide for themselves whether they wish to devote their entire life
to their job or prefer to follow other pursuits. Some people may need to keep
working for financial reasons, if for example, they have not paid off their
mortgages: thế chấp or they are still supporting children
M2: a law would be disastrous economically and socially
S1: The rapidly retirement population means that a greater proportion of
population are drawing pensions and a smaller proportion are working to
provide the money. A mandatory retirement age would only make this worse.
There is also evidence to suggest that people’s health and mental faculties can
decline quickly after retirement, and so this measure could increase the number
of years that pensioner require medical care.
S2. Lên lớp hỏi cô về chỗ này. (Support không liên quan) Most judges, for exam
ple, are over 60, because they require a huge amount of experience to be able to
do the job. Mandatory retirement seems as a repressive and draconian, it also
reduces the quality of labor because the wealthy of experiences take a long time
to accumulate the knowledge, but they obligate to quit when reaching 65 year
olds.