Professional Documents
Culture Documents
Nim: E1D021125
Class: 4G
Up to now this book has emphasized the first three steps in writing an effective
paragraph: making a point, supporting the point, and organizing and connecting the evidence.
This section will focus on the fourth step: writing clear, error-free sentences. You’ll learn
how to revise a paragraph so that your sentences flow smoothly and clearly. Then you’ll
review how to edit a paragraph for mistakes in grammar, punctuation, and spelling.
Revising Sentences The following strategies will help you to revise your sentences
effectively.
1. Use parallelism.
• Activity 9: Cross out the unbalanced part of each sentence. In the space
provided, revise the unbalanced part so that it matches the other item or items
in the sentence. The first one is done for you as an example
• Activity 10: Cross out the unbalanced part of each sentence. In the space
provided, revise the unbalanced part so that it matches the other item or items
in the sentence.
1. The preschool teacher asked the children to put away their art supplies and
that their hands needed to be washed for lunch.
Answer: The preschool teacher asked the children to put away their art
supplies and that their hands needed to be wash for lunch
2. Boring lectures, labs that are long, and mindless homework make college
uninteresting.
Answer: Boring lectures, long labs, and mindless homework make college
uninteresting.
3. The vending machines on campus offer oily chips that shouldn’t be eaten,
sugary beverages I shouldn’t drink, and stale cookies I don’t like.
4. Answer: The vending machines on campus offer oily chips that shouldn’t
eat, sugary beverages shouldn’t drink, and stale cookies I don’t like.
• We answer it fearfully.
• She felt deeply embarrassed because they were criticizing her work.
• Activity 20: Combine the simple sentences into one sentence by using the
opener shown in the margin and omitting repeated words. Use a comma to set
off the opener from the rest of the sentence
1. -ed word
• Raj studied for the anthropology exam.
• He was determined to do well.
Answer: Studied for the anthropology exam, Raj determined to do well
2. -ing word
• The soldier volunteered for another tour of duty.
• She knew the danger involved
Answer: Volunteering for another tour of duty, the soldier knew the danger
involved
• Activity 21: Combine the simple sentences into one sentence by using the
opener shown in the margin and omitting repeated words. Use a comma to set
off the opener from the rest of the sentence.
3. -ly word
• Nobody saw the thieves steal our bikes.
• This was unfortunate
Answer: Unfortunately, nobody saw the thieves steal our bikes.
4. to word group
• Marcel rented a limousine for the night.
• He wanted to make a good impression.
Answer: Marcel rented a limousine for the night. Because He wanted to
make a good impression.
5. Prepositional phrase
• Paige logs into Facebook to chat with her friends.
• She does this during her lunch breaks.
Answer: Paige logs into Facebook to chat with her friends during her lunch
breaks.
• Activity 22: Combine the simple sentences in each group into one sentence by
using adjectives or verbs in a series and by omitting repeated words. In most
cases, use a comma between the adjectives or verbs in a series
1. • I activated the burglar alarm.
• I slipped a kitchen knife under my mattress.
Answer:Before going to bed, I locked all the doors, activated the burglar
alarm, and slipped a kitchen knife under my mattress
2. • The contact lens was.
• The contact lens was.
• The floor was.
• The floor was.
Answer : The thin, and slippery contact lens fell onto the dirty, and tiled
floor.
• Activity 23: Combine the simple sentences in each group into one sentence by
using adjectives or verbs in a series and by omitting repeated words. In most
cases, use a comma between the adjectives or verbs in a series
1. Jackie carefully looked into her rear view mirror before leaving the
driveway. She locked her car door.
She strapped on her seat belt.
Answer:Jackie carefully looked into her rearview mirror before leaving the
driveway, locked her car door, and strapped on her seat belt.
2. The games were free.
The games.
The laptop is new.
The laptop is a Dell
Answer:I downloaded several free games, that require role playing to my
new Dell laptop.