Model Essay

BODY 1: There are many arguments in favour of my stance, but the most conspicuous one is that [if we
invest money into building highways and roads for private vehicles, it will only benefit the rich]. One
standout example originates from the fact that [only the wealthy have enough money to buy their own
cars, whereas the poor have to depend on buses and trains]. Needless to say, all these upsides are
beneficial to both society in general and the individuals in particular.

BODY 2: Another pivotal aspect of this issue is that [a lot of people will not want to use this system even
if we make it more modern and beautiful because it is very inconvenient]. The primary one stems from
the fact that [at peak hours, the public transit system will become extremely crowded because workers
and students will go to the trains and buses to get to work or school]. Hence, it is apparent why many
are against [developing public transportation].

ESSAY TOPIC:
As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people are spending
more and more time online, and this is having a negative effect on their life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

INTRO: The issue of [electronic inventions], which was always debatable, has now
become even more controversial. Due to the rapid advance in technology. It is
believed that due to electronic inventions including the computer and television,
people are spending more and more time on the internet, and this is having a
harmful influence on their life. As such, there are both merits and demerits to this
trend, but I am of the opinion that the former outdo the latter.

I agree: the internet is having I disagree: the internet is

a negative effect on people’s having a positive effect on
life people’s life
+ These problems will lead to: obesity, + Social benefits:
eye fatigue, body pain, insomnia - Helps people to keep in touch with
 Lower quality of life friends or relatives
+ What are they doing? - Make more friends  Expand social
 Checking their phones circle
 They are glued to screens  suffer - Helps shy children to socialize
from phone addiction + How did people search for
+ Why do people become addicted to information in the past?
smartphones?? - No need to ask parents or go to
- Because smartphones allow them to libraries for information
 do everything conveniently. - Can access info about any subject
- What will happen if people stop with a touch of a button
interacting with each other? - Convenient, time-saving and can fact
 Might lead to anti-social behaviors check by cross-referencing
BODY 1: There are many arguments in favour of my stance, but the most
conspicuous one is that it makes your lower quality of life. One standout example
originates from the fact that you will encounter many problems that can lead to
disease such as: obesity, eye fatigue, body pain, insomnia, etc... Needless to say, all
these upsides are beneficial to both society in general and the individual in
particular.
BODY 2: Another pivotal aspect of this issue is that there are many social benefits.
The primary one stems from the fact that helping people to keep in touch with
friends or relatives. In addition, people make more friends and this helps people
expand their social circle .Hence, it is apparent why many are against electronic
inventions.
CONCLUSION: With all the reasons mentioned above, a conclusion can be drawn
that the benefits of electronic inventions are far too great to ignore.