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and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016
compared with 2015.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make
comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the income from exporting products made by industries
such as petrol, engineering, precious accessories, agriculture and textiles in
2015 and the following year in a researched country. Furthermore, the added
table demonstrated the changes of value in listed categories by percentage.
Overall, gems and jewelry and agriculture products both had slightly decreased
sales, while other sectors had increased their sales, highlighted by the
significance of textiles.
The earning that comes from petroleum products has a slight rise in the period,
with a 3% increase from over 60 billion start, supported by the given table.
Also, in the period, the sales from industries, majoring in engineering and
textiles can be observed with a significant growth, with 8,5% increase reaching
more than 60 billion in 2016 and 15,24% extra for fabric with more than 30
billion.
Despite the growth from other sectors, the agriculture products lost 0,81% in the
period but still remained earning more than 30 billion at the end of the period.
And the same pattern appeared in the valuable accessories with 5,18% lost,
staggering 40 billion in 2015.
o Tuy nhiên, có một số lỗi nhỏ, ví dụ: “the agriculture products lost 0,81%
in the period but still remained earning more than 30 billion at the end of the period”
nên được viết lại thành “the agricultural products saw a decrease of 0.81% during the
period but still accounted for more than 30 billion at the end of the period”.
o Tuy nhiên, có một số thông tin không được mô tả rõ ràng, ví dụ: “gems
and jewelry and agriculture products both had slightly decreased sales” nên bổ sung
thông tin cụ thể về mức độ giảm.
o Coherence and Cohesion: Bài viết được tổ chức một cách logic và
mạch lạc.
o Lexical Resource: Bình đã sử dụng một loạt từ vựng phù hợp và chính
xác.