Please make it a point to keep the intro short

This is also a vlaid intro

but question is not only about skills education but also about research
so write an intro involving the two

you have to write the NEED FOR SKILLS BASED EDUCATION not the benefits
Totally missed the demand
 Govt steps is not needed
you have to write the steps needed further
Question is COMMENT so write your own suggestions

Challenges is not needed for the demand of the question

Conclusion is too large
Such a long conclusion will not interest the
evaluatorkeept is short and simple
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Overall Macro Comments (Feedback)
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Positive Feedback
You have a good understanding of the issue and
conceptual clarity is good but have not used it
properly to the demand of the question
You have good ability to write points in 2-3 lines
which will give you edge to write more points
Giving title to the points eases the work of
evaluator
Presentation is fine - answer looks neat
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Negative Feedback for improvement
Question understanding must be improved since you
have completely missed the demand of the answer
Right from the intro you have written only about skills
based education which is only 50% of the demand
Actual answer structure should be
Intro
Need for academic excellence
Steps to promote that
Need for skills based education
Steps to promote that
Conclusion
You are taking 4 lines for every point in that case you
will not have space to write more points and address all
demands - ensure that you complete each point within 3
lines
Even though you have good content and knowledge
you are getting only 50% marks since you have not
written to the demand of the question - this is the major
issue - if we don't write to the demand - no matter how
good we write - marks will be given only for writing to
the demand
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EVALUATION PARAMETERS
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1. Clarity of Thought

2. Context

3. Understanding on the demand of the Q

4. Introduction and Conclusion

Relevance

5. Content/Body relevance

6. Conceptual Clarity

7. Dimensionality and Interdisciplinary

Linkages

8. Examples and Illustrations

9. Presentation

10. Flow and the Structure

11. Language Competence

12. Objectivity

score
3.5/15

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