Destriati

The given graph presents the number of inquiries accepted by the Tourist Information Office in a
specific city over a six-month period in 2011. Ok

Overall, the number of enquiries delivered directly by tourist and by telephone are increased (not
again) significantly over the period, whereas the questions sent via letter/e-mail are decreased.

(Don’t fall into the same hole twice 😊)

Looking into more details, in early 2011,in early year of 2011, foreigners’ the most common ways for
foreigners to ask information is was contacting the tourist information office through the call center,
where there were (/as indicated by) almost 900 incoming calls in January. This number was higher
than that of the letters/e-mails, which was less than 800 letters sentd in and the number of people
came voluntarily to the office, which was approximately 400 persons. This number was higher than
inquiries received via letters or emails (less than 800 letters sent) and the number of people who
visited the office voluntarily (approximately 400). Despite the fact that the incoming calls fell slightly
from 900 to 800 calls in February,; however, it gradually increased in the next following month and
reached 1600 calls at the end of the period.

By contrast, In January, the quantity of letters/e-mails sent to the office which initially (missing verb)
was initially around 800 pieces in January, but then continued to decline over time.as times went by.
The biggest decline in letters/e-mails occurred in total of delivered mails decreased sharply
throughout between April and May, where 500 documents in April and less than 400 documents in
May (missing verbs) where the number dropped significantly from 500 to 400 enquiries. On the
other hand, the number of peoples who visited the office, which started at the lowest point of
merely 400 people gradually increaseds, until it is exceed other methods and reached its
contributions peak at, it is almost 2000 visitorsarrival in June.

TA: 6, CC: 5 (some ideas should be better grouped according to the overview), LR: 6, GRA: 5 (missing
verbs), Overall: 5.5

Lia:

The diagram gives information about the quantity of questioning inquiries accepted by the Tourist
Information Office in one a city starting from January to June in 2011.
Overall, the number of enquiries received from tourist that asking (missing verb) in person and by
telephone to the office increased over the periode, whereas the amount of tourists that looking
(missing verb)for the information by sending letter/email were on reverse. Overall, inquiries made in
person and by phone increased throughout the period, while inquiries via letter/email declined/
were on the reverse.

To begin with, in jJanuary the most enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office was through
the telephone, being asked 900 times a month (awkward phrase: ‘enquiries being asked’. This was
higher than incoming questions in person and via letters/emails which were ask approximately 450
and 750 times a month. However, apart from a brief fall in February, the enquiries by cellphone
(telephone is different from cell phone) gradually inclined over the 4 month timescale to finish at
1600. The biggest rise was seen in the amount of incoming questions asking personally by the
tourists. It increased sharply from januaryJanuary and reached the its peak atof 1900 in June. To
begin with, the highest number of enquiries were received by the Tourist Information Office through
the telephone, since there were 900 callers to the office. This was higher than the number of
questions asked by directly visiting the office in person and those sent via letters/emails, which
amounted to 450 and 750 respectively a month. However, apart from a brief fall in February,
telephone enquiries gradually inclined over the 4-month timescale to finish at 1600. The biggest rise,
however, was seen in the number of questions asked via in person, which initially started at only
above 400 inquiries in January, gradually rising to over 600 in February, exceeding the questions sent
by letters/emails and asked via telephone in March, and consistently soared to reach its peak at
almost 2000 visitors at the end of the given period.

In sharp contrast to this, the number of questions receiveding by emails had dropped gradually
between January and June in 2011. It started atfrom 750 in January and then finished at the lowest
level in June (merely at around 350 enquiriestimes), which was far lower thancompared with the
amount of incoming number of enquiries asked via in person and via phone , which accounted
forwith reception at 1900 and 1600 respectively at the end of the given periodtimes a month. .

TA: 6, CC: 6 (good idea organization), LR: 5 (some verbs need to be adjusted according to the
question context, such as: being asked 900 times (since we talk about the method used here), GRA:
5, verb formation problem, were ask, passive voice, comparison and contrast, etc), Overall: 5.5

Pemy Ria:

The graph ilustrateillustrate the quantity of questions collected obtained by Tourist Information
Office in a specific city from January to June in 2011.

Overall, it is clearly seen that the number of enquiries asked by tourists in a direct way and by
telephone went up gradually, while the enquiries collected sent by letters/emails dropped.

Looking into more details, in January, the number of tourist enquiries accepted by letters/emails
gained reached 750 questions. This wasseemed similar with enquiries received by telephone (850)
and directly atby the Ttourist Information Office (400) in the first month. However, at the end of
period, this trend became unpopular, (missing connector) the tourist tended to prefer using
telephone or asking directly to Tourist Information Office. However, while this trend of using written
communication was less preferred by the end of the period, tourists tended to favor phone calls or
asking directly at the Tourist Information Office.
In contrast, tourists used the other two ways to contact the Tourist Information Office (unclear
message, increasing or decreasing? At least give a little hint of the frequency). Telephone access
increased sharply around May to June, from…(data) reaching a peak of 1600 enquiries at by the end
of period. The highest rise was found in directly way. Tourist asked in real to the Tourist Information
Office with number of questions almost 2000 (awkward part). In contrast, tourists used phone calls
or in-person visits more frequently. Telephone enquiries increased sharply from May to June,
reaching a peak of 1,600 enquiries by the end of the period. The highest increase was seen in direct
enquiries, with tourists asking in person at the Tourist Information Office reaching nearly 2,000
questions.

TA: 6, CC: 5, LR: 5, GRA: 5: Overall: 5

Asman Hafiz:

The diagram depicts the number of questions obtained by the Tourist Information Centre in a city
from three different sources: in person, by email and telephone over a half period of 2011.

To sum up, the graph shows an upward trend between in person and by telephone; however, people
who enquired by email remained decreased. To sum up, the graph shows an upward trend in
enquiries made in person and by telephone, while enquiries by email decreased.

To begin with, in January, people enquiring by telephone was the most significant of all (this part is
awkward), and it was approximately a little under than 1000 (a quarter), but there was a slight fall in
the following month, (run on) while from March to April doubled. Then this was followed by other
rises until Juny and reached 1400. FuthermoreFurthermore, in person was (lacking context) the the
lowest among them in January, but it rose dramatically to the next following months and peaked at
just under 1600 in May. In contrast, they boomed in Juny to almost 2000 and became the highest
number of all items (not items but methods of communication). Suggested: In January, phone
enquiries were the highest at around a quarter (a little under 1,000). There was a slight dip in
February, but enquiries doubled from March to April and continued to rise until June, reaching a
peak of 1,400. Meanwhile, in-person enquiries started the lowest in January but rose dramatically in
the following months, peaking at just under 1,600 in May. In June, in-person enquiries increased
significantly to nearly 2,000, becoming the highest overall.

Regarding to people who used email, they started (inefficient) a little lower than 800 in January,
afterwards (connector between sentences, punctuation problem of comma) there was an equal
number in the next two months merely 700; however, they accidentally experienced a decrease until
April and gained to aboout one-third (run on). Finally, the data for the last two months doubled only
about 400 (clarity problems). Suggested: Email enquiries began slightly below 800 in January. They
remained steady at around 700 for the next two months before decreasing slightly in April. Enquiries
then increased to around one-third (around 400) by the end of the period, although they didn't quite
double.

TA: 5, CC: 5 (major clarity problems due to lack of contextualization), LR: 5 (awkward phrases), GRA:
5: run on sentences). Overall: 5

Nong Astriyana:

The graph represents a quantity of inquires accepted by the Tourist Information Office in three
different ways in one city starting from January to June in 2011.
As is observed from the graph, the quantity of inquiries received via person or telephone continued
to grow over time, while inquiries by letter or email shows the opposite.

Looking into more details, in January most tourists made inquiries over the telephone (around 900)
and fewest asked in person (around 450). However, Tourist inquiries by person continued to grow to
the same level as telephone inquiries about 1000 people in between March and April. At the end of
the period, the number of inquires by person reached approximately 1900 people and by telephone
reached exactly 1600 people.

Tourist inquiries by letter/email have a different trend, in january the quantity of inquiries by
letter/email almost similar to inquiries by telephone. However, In the following months it continued
to decline around 400 people over the end of the period.

Julio:

The presented line graph illustrates how many enquiries the tourist information office got in the first
semester of 2011.

Overall, it is clear that there was an upward trend in the quantity of questions asked directly in
person and by telephone. In contrast, a downward trend in the number of letters or emails sent to
the tourist information office.

With regard to the number of enquires received by phone, in January, it was the the highest
compared to others (around 850 questions), and continued to go up with a total of 1600 questions in
June. Enquiries delivered directly in January accounted for just over 400 and were the lowest.
However, this number rose dramatically over the given period and surpassed the questions asked by
phone in April (about 1250 enquiries), then reached the peak of around 1850 questions in June.

On the other hand, questions asked through email fell steadily from January to March, then dropped
sharply until May (just under 400 questions) and levelled off to June.

1946: ~.

The presented graph illustrates data about questions obtained by the Tourist Information Center in a
certain town for a half-year period in 2011.

On the whole, it is apparent from the figures that there had been a dramatic increase in the number
of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Center by telephone and in person for a half-year
period. With the exception of by letter or email, which was on the reverse.

To begin with, the number of inquiries received by the tourist information office in person increased
from 400 to 600 letters from January to February 2011. However, this number was less than that via
letter or email, which was 700 in February. Despite the fact that inquiries by letter or email
decreased by as much as 100 letters from January to February, This decrease in number has also
occurred through calls, although inquiries by telephone remained the highest in February with 800
calls and then experienced an increase until June. Inquiries made in person followed a similar trend
with inquiries made by telephone, which, in the end, was the highest number in the total of 1900
questions.

In spite of the fact that the number of questions asked by letter or email was higher than inquiries
made in person in February, this number continued to decline over the next 4 months, reaching only
close to 400 questions in June, with a difference of almost 1,500 inquiries asked in person.
Ana:

The line graph illustrates that the Tourist Information Office received several enquiries in one city
over six months in 2011. Overall, it is clear that the number of enquiries received increased both in
person and over the phone, whereas there was a decrease via letter or email.

To begin with, in January, the Tourist Information Office received the highest number of enquiries by
phone which amounted to 900 enquiries in one month. These figures are much higher than the 750
and 450 enquiries received via letter or email and person respectively. However, despite the high
number of enquiries in January, telephone enquiries were constant from March to April at around
1000 enquiries, and were then overtaken by in-person enquiries from April to June.

In sharp contrast to this, the Tourist Information Office received information through other enquiries
at different rates. In-person enquiries increased gradually to overtake letter or email and telephone
enquiries from March to June which amounted to 800 to 1900 enquiries. The biggest drop was seen
in letter or email enquiries as the number of enquiries dropped sharply from March to May which
amounted to 650 to 350 enquiries. It then levelled off until June at around 350 enquiries.

Aisyah:

The line graph delineates the quantity of enquiries received by the Tourist Information in one city
over half of the era in 2011 in three distinctive approaches.

Overall, it is notable that the total of queries by in-person and telephone soared significantly, except
for questioning by letter/email which decreased gradually from January to June 2011 at just under
400.

Having said that, in January, the telephone was the most popular way of delivering enquiries by
tourists, being used around 900 times a month. This was a little higher than letter/email and in-
person, which were used approximately 700 and 400 times a year respectively. However, apart from
a brief rise again from February to March, the delivering question by telephone gradually declined
over a month's timescale to only 800. This number was still well above than quantity of all in
February, though. Notwithstanding the foregoing, the trend of sending questions by telephone
climbed considerably and passed the second-highest top point after the in-person technique. On the
other hand, addressing queries directly in person by travellers was the lowest method that they used
in the first year, accounting for 400. Nevertheless, this trend grew rapidly and reached its peak in
June, which amounted to almost 1,900.

In sharp contrast to this, the travellers asked for information on the other system at many lower
levels. The questions that were sent by tourists to the office via letter/email decreased bit by bit until
they overtook the delivering queries in-person in the middle of the second month of 2011. It then
levelled off sharply from March to May (nearly 200) and remained stable in the last epoch.

Niju:

The line graph illustrates the number of questions the Tourist Information office gets in a city over
the first half year 2011. Overall, enquiries received through telephone and in person increased
dramatically, except for questions received through letter or email which had experienced a decline.
Additionally, the enquiries collected in person was highest among the other methods.

To begin with, in Januray, visitors asked for information about travel stuff by using telephone with an
amount of nearly 1000 calls. This was higher than letter/email which only got less than 800 and face
to face with approximately 400 questions. However, the request of information that came from a
direct conversation (face to face) exceeded any other method and increased gradually in the next
two months untill it peaked at almost 2000 enquiries in June. It also happened for the telephone
request which had experienced an upward trend although it had decreased slightly in february.

In sharp contrast to this, letter/email questions which was at the second highest method in January
with around 800 emails then continued to drop until the end of June. The most significant decline of
this method was in may with less than 400 enquires. It fell for roughly one quarter from the amount
of emails received at the beginning of the year.

Edysul Isdar:

The line chart gives information about how many enquiries received by the Tourist Information
Centre in a city from January to June in 2011. Overall, there was an upward trend in the reception of
enquiries by person and telephone over the period, while the proportion of enquiries accepted by
letter or email showed a downward trend.

Looking into more details, the number of enquiries received by telephone was highest in January at
900 and continued to increase until it peaked at 1600, although it fluctuated. Enquiry numbers
received by person had the biggest rise over the period of months by 1450 and increased gradually
(from 450 to 1900) until it overtook the reception by letter or email between February and March. It
then went up dramatically by telephone over the March to June.

In sharp contrast to this, although the number of enquiries accepted by letter or email had the
second-highest rate after by telephone in January, it declined steadily until March to April and then
remained constant until June.

(Anggun Simaremare):

The line graph depicts how many enquiries fielded by the tourist information office in single city
during a six-month period in 2011.

Overall, the quantity of enquiries by telephone and in person maintained to surge throughout the
period, while by email and letter were on the reverse.

In January, the most popular queries was by telephone, being received over 800 enquiries. This was
nearly doubled the number of enquiries received in person. Over two months, Telephone enquiries
hit 1000 in March and remained stable till April and finally increased over the following months.
While the number of enquiries in person saw growth to 800 and continued an increase trend,
receiving approximately 1800 enquiries.

In contrast, the quantity of enquiries fielded by email and letter slightly decreased over three
months, before declined sharply in the following months. By the end of this period, the number of
enquiries had reduced and hit the lowest point less than 400.

( Ali Yasfi):

The line chart gives information about the account for enquiries received by the Tourist Information
Office in one city over a half of period in 2011. It can be clearly seen that information received by
telephone and person gradually increase throughout the period, meanwhile the information sources
by letter/email was the only categories that finished decrease.

In January, the telephone became the most favourites media for the society to give information to
the Tourist Information Office (TIO) with around 900 people while in the first moth slightly dropped
with 100 peoples decide to not using the telephone again; however, after that setback, the
telephone comeback on the positive track with constantly increase except the period of February to
march and finished with 1600 user. The person source was the lowest number in the first moth with
approximately 400 users but in the next month it constantly grew up and reach a peak in the last
month with almost 2000 users.

Furthermore, the last source was letter/email source and also the only source that decreased
consistently from first month to May and finished with twice lower than it started with 200 users.
Between May and June there was no change for this source.